Dawnfrost [Riverclan]

Dawnfrost

Age: 15 Moons
Gender:She-cat
Rank: Warrior
Clan: Riverclan
Short Description:ginger and white shorthair she-cat with green eyes
Appearance:
Basic stats
Pelt: Ginger and white
Tabby markings: Faint Makarel tabbying
Build: Medium, closer to cobby
Eyes: Light green
If you were upwind from her and you saw her, you would think Dawnfrost was a tom. She is powerfully built and doesn't have the lithe grace that other she cats have. She constantly trains, causing her to have a powerful muscular build. Her body and face are laced with scars despite her young age. Her light green eyes have a harsh glint to them and she is master of the glare that will freeze a cat in place at ten paces.
Personality:Dawnfrost is a pretty young she-cat. She was the last born of her litter and was born as the dawn broke over the camp. The only female of her litter she tends to be a bit tomboyish at times. However this tomboyishness shows up in a anything-you-can-do-I-can-do-better attitude. If pushed around she will react not by exploding and lashing out. Instead she will give the offender the cold shoulder and plot her revenge. Despite this she tends to pus her self to far and often ends up on the medicine cat den because of this. Usually it's just a minor thing that needs to be patched up, then she's back on her feet and back to training.
She is not the type of cat to play and have fun. Instead she concentrates on training and behaves aloof to all those around her, even her siblings.
Likes:
Training
Being left alone
Dislikes:
Pretty much everything else
Hobbies:
None, she's far to serious for that
History: She had an uneventful history. When she was young she was fond of playing with her fellow kits, but as she grew older this vanished and was taken over by intense self regimented training. This started when she was a mere four moons old. By the time she was six moons she was stronger and faster than the other kits. She always took herself quite seriously and would get snappy if her fellow apprentices goofed off. Her sharp temper, and cold personality earned her the warrior name of Dawnfrost. Now she is looking to mentor an apprentice herself. She has no interest in taking a mate.

Before I say anything I forgot to mention this in pm: I can help make your bio a little longer with things that happened in her past kithood like I did with Lionstrike ^_^

Actually, the only thing I remember that you can add is that Dawnkit and Lionkit(strike) ususally got into arguements, Sunkit(rise) and Dawnkit(frost) were close and would always make up games such as who can jump the farthest, and she normally got into fights with other kits in the nursery such as Darkkit(wind) and Lotuskit(flower)

That's all I remember and I'm too lazy to check, but anyway you can add it if you want, but it doesn't matter to me ^_^ Anyway to the mistakes:

1. Your appearance should be a destription, or paragraph. All you really need to do it put what you listed in the Appearance in a paragraph and your all set.

2. Have your short description a little less detailed. For example: Ginger and white she-cat with light green eyes. Short and sweet, like the descriptions in the Warriors books

3.

Training, being left the @#$@# alone

Even though this may sound a little strict and it doesn't actually mean that its cussing, but to be on the safe side it should be stated: being left alone, because just that is a little overdoing it. I hope you understand ^_^;

Besides that no mistakes found. After everything is fixed up it'll be accepted =)

Accepted~ Thanks a lot